Sunday, September 8, 2013

Brothers and Sisters


Samantha screamed "Mom!"

"What darling?" Her mother spoke with such grace.

"I am been tackled!" Samantha said in a way that seemed obvious.

"By who?"

"By Max!"  Samantha said in a annoyed tone.

"Max!"  Her mother called him over.

"Yes maim?"  He said in a innocent way.  

"Did you tackle your sister?"  Her mother questioned him in a reasonable way.  No response.

"Max" she said more firmly.

"Ummm maybe"  He said trying to sound innocent.

"Max, did you tackle your sister?"  

"Yes maim"  he said very quietly.

"Max, you know that is not right!"

Max said sadly "I know."

"What do you say to your sister?"  His mother said like he should know.

"Sorry"  Max said it really quickly like it didn't mean anything.

"In a nice way, Max."  Her mother said in a demanding voice.

"I'm sorry Samantha"  he said nicely.  His mother walked off.  Max smiled, then ran towards Samantha.

"Mom!"  Samantha yelled.

"What is it now honey?"  Her mother sounded annoyed.

"Max tackled me again!"

"Max go to your room!"  His mother commanded!  Max went to his room.

"Thanks, mom!"  Samantha said. 

3 comments:

  1. Hi Annie, I really like your dialogue! It has lots of detail and it could happen in real life.

    Happy Blogging,
    Omar

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  2. Hey Annie,
    This dialouge it really amazing! Its very relatable and I can picture what is happening when Max tackles his sister! Keep it up!
    Katie

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  3. Hi Annie, to me your book is filled with tons of amazing dialogue! It has a lot of non-fiction life meaning it is more than likely to happen in the real world.

    Bennett

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